The Tom Veitch Files

[page number, circled: 67] Taking one of the invader’s ships, they escape the planet, under fire and attack from the beast-riders and the city guns. [margin: pursued by the [uncertain: invading?] warriors —] * The remaining brother(s) of the warlord are enraged. As they loot the treasure rooms of IzIz they declare a great bounty on the head of the old Jedi and the woman Jedi Knight. [margin: Some of the warlord’s best warriors go after [uncertain: Vim +?] the old Jedi.] * * * * * We cut to Ulic and his female cohort, some time later. They [struck: are after] [inserted: have heard of] the huge bounty on the old Jedi and his apprentice. [margin: Ulic must speak bitterly of the Jedi -- he is crazed, pathological. the woman has a strong bond to him -- she is what holds him together,] They track the old Jedi to his base on the planet (name). [This needs to be an interesting location.] [margin: Or they accidentally meet + know about the bounty, [struck: so go after him.]] [margin: [uncertain: from these guys?]] [margin: [What if Ulic saves the old Jedi... we think he’s turned. But then he reveals he’s taking them in for the $$$]] There is a [struck: battle] with the other [struck: apprentices] of the old Jedi. But the old Jedi turns the tables and captures Ulic. "I know who you are[inserted: ,] Qel-Droma. You are wanted for justice by your family and by the Republic." [margin: ISSUE #3] * The old Jedi send Ulic’s cohort packing. Then he and Vima and another Jedi take Ulic to Alderaan, to the estate of Ulic’s father. * A tremendous scene between Ulic and his father. Ulic’s father cannot forgive him for the death of Cay...and for Ulic’s terrible crimes against the Jedi.