The Tom Veitch Files

[circled: 66] A river, that runs through the city, carries bodies downstream, into the wilderness domain of the Kira clan... Modon Kira and his wife look to the sky...he has brought her here, to hide her from the onslaught, in the fortress of his forefathers. [margin, red: they fly [uncertain: over the river?] away from the city ... to the protection of the Kira fortress.] * Then Kira and his beast- riders go into the skies over Onderon, to attack the low- flying ships of the invaders. This could be a neat scene, with beast-riders blasting gunners on open decks and/or landing their beasts on the hulls of sealed ships, the beasts tear their way through the hulls with tooth and claw. [margin, red: *] * Cut to an old Jedi and his young woman apprentice, who were visiting IzIz before the invasion began and are now trapped in the midst of the carnage. [margin: If not a character from [uncertain: early stories?], then Master Arca's Master. Otherwise someone we've never seen.] The young woman Jedi, about age twenty, is Vima Sunrider, daughter of Nomi Sunrider. As Jedi, they battle bravely and with force powers. But they are captured and dragged before one of the brother warlords. The warlord takes a fancy to young Vima, he wants to kill the old man and make her one of his concubines. But Vima demonstrates what she has become -- she saves her Master and is instrumental in the death of the warlord. [peripheral text on facing page, cropped at right:] T[illegible] s[illegible] un be * of As of bo Je * * fe Th on ap Th bas [Th int The oth Jed But tab "I You you Rep * coh Vima to Ulic * Ulic fath the Ulic the